film treatment-end changed

We decided to change the end of our full film treatment to fit in with the final girl theory in an non-stereotypical way, although she becomes masculine it's not to fight the villain, it's to survive. We think this will help put the genre of the film across better and is one of the big conventions of characters in horror films. This also means the ending is a cliff hanger and leaves the audience wondering what will happen next and if there will be another film.

Original Ending

The next day she stays at home, you see her watching tv, on laptop ect (fast pace) and that night her parents go out whilst she's sleeping. She wakes up to the door banging and as she knows her parents were going out just figures it was them. She goes downstairs and written on the living room wall in what appears to be blood it says 'last but not least!' Girl A starts shouting and crying, the front door flings open and wind blows through the house, she hears a girl crying and howling behind her, she runs out of the door, not looking behind her, see her running through the forest (scene 1 again), she falls on the floor turns over and screams, then a dark black figure envelopes her and as it pulls back and girl A is completely mutilated. Black cloaked figure moves away, music devil town fades on, boy from beginning of film is seen taking off a cloak, he goes into an en suite bathroom starts washing his hands and there's a shot of the sink so you see watered down blood running down the drain, he splashes water on his face and wipes it, pulls a creepy smile and the shot freezes on his face fades off and the end titles come on.

New Ending

The next day she stays at home, you see her watching tv, on laptop ect (fast pace) and that night her parents go out whilst she's sleeping. She wakes up to the door banging and as she knows her parents were going out just figures it was them. She goes downstairs and written on the living room wall in what appears to be blood it says 'last but not least!' Girl A starts shouting and crying, the front door flings open and wind blows through the house, she hears a girl crying and howling behind her, she runs out of the door, not looking behind her, see her running through the forest (scene 1 again), she falls on the floor turns over and screams, then a dark black figure envelopes her and as it pulls back and girl A is mutilated. Black cloaked figure moves away, music devil town fades on, boy from beginning of film is seen taking off a cloak, he goes into an en suite bathroom starts washing his hands and there's a shot of the sink so you see watered down blood running down the drain, he splashes water on his face and wipes it, pulls a creepy smile and the shot slowly zooms into his eye as he blinks, then the shot changes to girl A's closed eye which slowly zooms out and opens, zooms out to her laid on the floor with a knife in her shoulder just inches from her heart, which she looks at. The camera stops zooming at a medium long shot, she breathes in leans her hand over and rips the knife out of her chest roaring in a war cry manner, throws the knife as blood pumps out of her the camera zooms out, her still roaring, and pans to an establishing shot of the setting, the tops of trees from the forest and a dark starless night. then the end titles come on.